Grade 5 Good
3 of 109 sentences are hard to read.
1 of 109 sentences are very hard to read.
15 adverbs. Aim for 11 or fewer.
6 words or phrases can be simpler.
2 uses of passive voice. Aim for 22 or fewer.
Readability Formula Score
Flesch-Kincaid Reading Ease 74
Readability Formula Grade
Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level 5.2
Gunning-Fog Score 7.6
Coleman-Liau Index 9.5
SMOG Index 6.3
Automated Readability Index 3.4
Average Grade Level 6.4
Character Count 4,483
Syllable Count 1,523
Word Count 1,044
Sentence Count 113
Characters per Word 4.3
Syllables per Word 1.5
Words per Sentence 9.2
This was more of a restructure than an edit. I tried to speak directly to my (male) ideal reader. I was able to bring down words per sentence, but overall word count went up not down. I don’t think that will be an issue on the next go round. I have an abnormal amount of adverbs…especially for ME. But most of them are stylistic keepers. A few sentences need to be broken up for clarity which will also help with the word/sentence #.
What I’m most happy about is that it lost some of the residual preachy tone of the first one. It still cajoles a bit…but with humor?…soften by excessive adverbs?…Buying that? Not sure. We’ll see how the next go round goes.
“To live is so startling it leaves little time for anything else.” ~Emily Dickinson Lori Sailiata