Yep, much better. 🙂
7 Website Woes You Need To Cure to Convert Applicants
=> This one is difficult to grasp because you need to cure something to convert people. It would be easier to comprehend if you just said what the websites woes lead to. E.g. 7 Website Woes That Chase Away College Applicants.
Are These Ghastly Website Mistakes Scaring Off Your Potential Applicants?
=> This is pretty good. You can make it slightly more intriguing by using the word “common”: Are These Common Website Mistakes Scaring Off Your Applicants? [not sure you need potential?]
11 Content Tips for Colleges: Turn Your Dusty Website Copy Into Sparkling, Student-Friendly Prose
=> At nearly 100 characters, this one is a little long. Perhaps: 10 Content Tips for Colleges: Turn Your Dusty Web Copy Into Student-Friendly Prose (82 characters) [Try to avoid two adjectives before a noun] – great way to combine two headlines (especially if “content tips for colleges” is an important key phrase for search engine traffic?)
Is Cumbersome Copy Weighing Down Your College Website?
=> This one is great.
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.