Yes, good analysis of the blog intro about Einstein (but they could have composed a better headline).
Your own edited intro is much much better (did I comment too quickly?). I like it! 🙂
What if you could do something to simplify the nit-picky details that steal your time and energy when you’re traveling?
=> You can slightly shorten this: What if you could simplify the nit-picky details that steal your time and energy when you’re traveling? [phrases like “do something” or “things” can almost always be deleted or replaced by a specific phrase]
The only other point is that your promise almost sounds too good to be true. In such a case, you might want to address this in your post, e.g. by adding:
Sounds too good to be true?
Allow me to explain…
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