Excellent work. How did you find using the formula?
A few minor comments:
It’s 1 am in the morning.
=> I’d simply say: 1am in the morning. (remove “it’s” as it’s meaningless)
“Who the hell does he think he is.”
“I should have stood upto him!”
“Tomorrow I’m going to give him a piece of my mind”
“Would I lose my job?”
“What will happen to my family?”
“What have I ever done do him?”
=> These are all great, but to keep the reader moving on, I’d suggest deleting two or three. You can get the idea across in fewer thoughts, too.
With a simple mind shift not only am I able to be in control of my thoughts, I’m also able to deal with the situation better.
=> You can make this easier to understand when you cut it in two sentences. E.g. With a simple mind shift I can control my thoughts. And what’s more, I’m able to deal with the situation better.
=> You can make it even better by making it more specific. E.g.: With a simple mind shift I can control my thoughts, and stop tossing in bed when I need my sleep. And what’s more, I’m able to deal with rude people. I can stay relaxed and think clearly–even when I’m put under pressure.
I can very easily snap out of obsessive thoughts.
=> You can delete “very”.
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