*phew* this was another toughie. I really had to dig deep to come up with these sensory and emotional options. Hope I did well.
Yes, you’re doing exceedingly well. Thinking about sensory words can be tough at first. But you’ll soon find it easier to include more sensory and emotional words in your writing. And as you can see in the changes you made to your blog post sentences, you immediately add more personality to your writing. You sound less like a textbook, and more human.
To do that, you’ve got to really feel the pain of being so overwhelmed. Recognise that you’ve got piles of stuff all over your desk. Open your drawers and they’re a mess. Your phone’s cut because you forgot to pay the bill on time.
=> This would be a good point to introduce questions and address your reader directly (I’m assuming these are not written for Priya?). E.g.: Are you feeling so overwhelmed, that you’re in pain? Do you fear opening your drawers because you know you can’t find what you’re looking for? Have you forgotten to pay your phone bill because it was buried under a pile of paperwork?
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.