The opening I want to review is from Alyson Stanfield. She’s a Art biz blogger were I do find nuggets of art related information. What I noticed is that she could approve with the lessons we learn in this module.
Old text:
Impatience Killed the Blog (Revive It!)
Your blog won’t become popular overnight. Blogging is a process, a commitment.
After last week’s article, The Gold Mine in Your Artist Blog, several people commented to the tune of: My blog is no gold mine. I can’t get any traffic or interaction with people.
In nearly 10 years of blogging and many years of teaching artists to blog, I have witnessed a large number of artists build successful blogs.
I have also, sadly, watched even more artists’ blogs falter. The main reason artists’ blogs fail is impatience.
There’s no instant gratification at a blog’s birth. No showering of thumbs-up signs or insightful comments. This often results in a lack of commitment to writing for the blog and little desire to learn the craft of good blogging.
Let’s take a closer look at these missteps in order to help you get more traffic.
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Overall she doesn’t empathize much with the reader. She is more lecturing. She isn’t specific enough. To approach this one I decided to write it again, using her words but the lessons from the cheatcheet.
New opening text:
Desperately needed:
Patience!
You know there is no instant gratification at a blog’s birth.
No showering of thumbs-up signs or insightful comments. Your blog won’t become popular overnight. Blogging is a process, a commitment.
In 10 years of blogging and many years of teaching artists to blog, I have witnessed a large number of artists build successful blogs. I have also, sadly, watched even more artists’ blogs falter.
The main reason artists’ blogs fail is impatience. This often results in a lack of commitment to writing for the blog and little desire to learn the craft of good blogging.
Let’s take a closer look at these missteps in order to help you get more traffic with a few valuable insights that will help you to get on track.
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This is still not a good paragraph, I am aware of this. I wanted to play around with her words and get the structure good. She misses a sunny destination where she takes her readers to. It was a valuable lesson in recognizing why it wasn’t good and stearing in the direction were it could have gone. Your cheat sheet helped a lot.
I never really looked at opening paragraphs that much. This psychology of getting the reader to keep on reading does feel a bit like cheating. Do people mind that you play these tricks?
But I have to admit that reading a good opening does make you want to read on. (Now I know why I spent so many hours on copyblogger or your site!). On example on Copyblogger was from Brett Kelly, he could have been a student of yours. I didn’t take Brett’s opening as it is a perfect one. It triggered me to read the post 😉
http://www.copyblogger.com/remember-everything-evernote/
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