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Reply To: Helga – Module 6

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June 12, 2014 at 3:14 pm #1221
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Helga
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The opening I want to review is from Alyson Stanfield. She’s a Art biz blogger were I do find nuggets of art related information. What I noticed is that she could approve with the lessons we learn in this module.

Old text:

Impatience Killed the Blog (Revive It!)

Your blog won’t become popular overnight. Blogging is a process, a commitment.

After last week’s article, The Gold Mine in Your Artist Blog, several people commented to the tune of: My blog is no gold mine. I can’t get any traffic or interaction with people.

In nearly 10 years of blogging and many years of teaching artists to blog, I have witnessed a large number of artists build successful blogs.

I have also, sadly, watched even more artists’ blogs falter. The main reason artists’ blogs fail is impatience.

There’s no instant gratification at a blog’s birth. No showering of thumbs-up signs or insightful comments. This often results in a lack of commitment to writing for the blog and little desire to learn the craft of good blogging.

Let’s take a closer look at these missteps in order to help you get more traffic.
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Overall she doesn’t empathize much with the reader. She is more lecturing. She isn’t specific enough. To approach this one I decided to write it again, using her words but the lessons from the cheatcheet.

New opening text:

Desperately needed:

Patience!

You know there is no instant gratification at a blog’s birth.

No showering of thumbs-up signs or insightful comments. Your blog won’t become popular overnight. Blogging is a process, a commitment.

In 10 years of blogging and many years of teaching artists to blog, I have witnessed a large number of artists build successful blogs. I have also, sadly, watched even more artists’ blogs falter.

The main reason artists’ blogs fail is impatience. This often results in a lack of commitment to writing for the blog and little desire to learn the craft of good blogging.

Let’s take a closer look at these missteps in order to help you get more traffic with a few valuable insights that will help you to get on track.

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This is still not a good paragraph, I am aware of this. I wanted to play around with her words and get the structure good. She misses a sunny destination where she takes her readers to. It was a valuable lesson in recognizing why it wasn’t good and stearing in the direction were it could have gone. Your cheat sheet helped a lot.

I never really looked at opening paragraphs that much. This psychology of getting the reader to keep on reading does feel a bit like cheating. Do people mind that you play these tricks?

But I have to admit that reading a good opening does make you want to read on. (Now I know why I spent so many hours on copyblogger or your site!). On example on Copyblogger was from Brett Kelly, he could have been a student of yours. I didn’t take Brett’s opening as it is a perfect one. It triggered me to read the post 😉
http://www.copyblogger.com/remember-everything-evernote/


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