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Excellent work, Helga. I like the intro to your post about precious travel moments. You could make it even better by making the following sentences more specific.
You are on holiday in an awesome part of our planet. Every day you enjoy the most amazing landscapes. You take lots of pictures. You know you want to remember every bit of this trip.
=> Picturing a holiday somewhere with amazing landscapes is more difficult than picturing a specific situation. For instance:
Picture this:
You’re on a walking holiday in the Alps. Everyday you enjoy the view of the snow-capped mountains. You take lots of pictures. You try to retain wonderful calmness you feel as a tiny human being in this wonderful part of planet earth.
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Even if Sarah hasn’t been to the Alps, she can probably picture this scene. We’ll talk about this more later in the course.
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