This is still not a good paragraph, I am aware of this
I think it’s pretty good! 🙂 the only thing that’s missing, is a stronger promise of what readers will learn when reading the post. “Staying on track” is a little vague. “Get more traffic” is better, but could be a little stronger.
I never really looked at opening paragraphs that much. This psychology of getting the reader to keep on reading does feel a bit like cheating. Do people mind that you play these tricks?
Have you ever felt cheated when reading my posts? As long as you don’t overpromise, it should be fine. Just make sure you deliver your promise in your blog post. Don’t you think so?
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.