But if every post would start like this people might notice it and get bored.
Yes, when you follow the formula too slavishly it becomes a little boring. But you’ll find yourself playing with the formula and varying it a little. And the most important point is learning how writers pull you into posts, and why you don’t feel inspired to read a post. Because that’s how you can continue to learn and “steal” writing techniques.
I love your revised opening – really like how you sketch the traveling experience in the Grand Canyon.
My only comment is that I would delete “I bet you’ve done some of my tips already” because that could be a disincentive to reading the post.
This is going to be a great post!
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.