Tuesday’s homework: Analyzing a closing paragraph
“This baby will come out eventually, it doesn’t matter how, or when. That bit was never important anyway.
This baby will make you realize how much love the human heart is capable of. You look at your older children with fresh eyes, and realize how painful it is to be away from them. You will look at your husband and be grateful for three precious gifts he has given you, and forgive him for (almost) everything else. Your life will be hectic and crazy and loud and full of shouting and frustration and love. You will have even more of those special experiences, even more of those breathtaking moments.
You will finally be complete.
You hope.”
The key message for the reader is that you’re up to the challenge of having a third child – everything will be okay, and it will actually be much better than okay.
I found this closing inspirational because it addresses many of the key fears a pregnant woman might be having when another baby is on the way. It also acknowledges that it’s okay if things aren’t perfect.
The sensory words didn’t really jump out (they’re pretty common ones), but I liked how this sentence strung a bunch of negative sensory words and then ended with a positive one. It felt powerful.
“Your life will be hectic and crazy and loud and full of shouting and frustration and love.”
I didn’t find the long paragraph in the middle difficult to read, I thought it moved really well. I liked the short sentences at the end, but I found that the “You hope.” line kind of undid everything for me. I was feeling really assured about everything, and then it opened up the door for doubt.
But overall, I found this closing had a really nice feeling about it.
Alissa R.