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I guess we’ll never know!
Yes, and if we don’t understand it, the author has failed to communicate her message to us – no matter whether she tried to be positive or not.
A good start on your closing paragraph!
I stumbled over “than in working years of experience to your advantage” as I had to think about the sentence structure. Did you read your paragraph aloud? This can often help to spot difficult sentences – if you stumble over your words, then your readers will probably stumble, too.
An alternative would be: Stop spending so much time fretting over grey hairs. Instead, start using your wealth of experience to your advantage.
You are the one all the young people look up to because you are exactly who they want to be.
=> Perhaps be a little careful that you don’t exaggerate. Do all the young people look up to older people because they want to be exactly like you are?
Love the reference to fine wine and good cheese 🙂
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