Kind of a long sentence, but…
It’s fine to have long sentences occasionally 🙂 It reads fine. You can slightly shorten it:
Kind of like when your uncle Ray, the raging alcoholic,
actuallyDOESN’T make a pass at the maid of honorduring the wedding.
Sorry for my slow reply. I’ve been on vacation and tried to limit my working hours. 🙂
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