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Iām finding this module tougher than the other ones.
It’s a completely different way of writing. Not many bloggers use this, but when you do, it makes the content more personal because you’re creating your own unique metaphors.
You’ve done really really well, because you’ve sketched clear pictures for each comparison. I can immediately picture what happened.
He was as sad as a 4 year old boy who lost his first automatic racing car toy.
=> This is the only one I can’t picture in my mind, because I can’t see what happened with the toy. Perhaps:
He was sad as a 4-year old boy whose first racing car toy was crushed by car in the street.
He was sad as a 4-year old boy frantically searching for his racing car toy, but unable to find it anywhere.
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