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Your assignments are really pushing me. I like it!
If it was easy, you wouldn’t learn so much, would you? I’m glad you’re enjoying it!
Excellent start to your blog post. A few suggestions:
Your little child is a full two years old now.
=> This can be shorter: Your child is now two years old. [if a child is two years, it’s obvious that he or she is little. Do you need “full”?]
But how do you go about choosing a preschool.
=> Add a question mark at the end as it’s phrased as a question: But how do you go about choosing a preschool?
Gosh, there is a preschool in every street of your neighbourhood.
=> Try to avoid “there”: Gosh, every street of your neighbourhood seems to have a preschool.
Choosing a preschool can be a nightmare. But only if you are not clear what you are looking for.
Here is what I learnt.
=> You could stress a little more that knowing what you’re looking for is easy to find out, because it’s not crystal-clear yet what you’re going to share in this post yet. Perhaps:
Choosing a preschool can be a nightmare. But only if you’re not clear what you’re looking for.
And defining your requirements may seem difficult, but it’s quite easy.
Here’s what I learnt.
[Using contractions like “you’re” makes your content slightly more informal. You don’t have to use them.]
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Above are just minor points. I’m being super-critical, but that’s my job. 🙂
Your opening would draw Priya into your blog post. Well done.
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