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Reply To: Mohammed Ali – Module 9

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June 22, 2014 at 11:08 am #1288
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Henneke
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Your metaphor for mindful eating is great. You may want to sharpen your first sentence, as “spending time with a lover” is a little vague. Every reader will wonder – does he mean sex or something else? You could go for “cuddling your lover”, or “being intimate with your lover”, or “listening to your lover talk”.

You want to sketch a picture in your reader’s mind. “Spending time” leaves too many options open.

By the way, at first I was thinking about “having a romantic dinner with your lover”, but I think that’s confusing as it’s too close to mindful eating (and when you have a romantic dinner, you’re not eating mindfully at all!).


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