I like your idea for a “bribe”.
In English the phrase “snoezelen-like experience” sounds a bit like a mouthful, and I’d probably drop the like: How to create a snoezelen experience at home. If you create a list of items, you could also turn it into a list headline.
I like how you focus on the benefit in the subhead (Help your child relax, sleep better, and communicate better (and have fun at the same time!)). Well done.
Have you considered creating a short email series instead of an ebook? My experience is that short emails increase interaction a lot. You could for instance create a series of 7 emails, send them out daily, and discuss one or two sensory items they can use at home plus some suggestions how to use them. The emails I have in my series have fewer than 200 words each – this makes it a super quick read and people get immediate value out of 30 seconds reading.
In the blog and emails I send I want to help you help your child improve, and stay motivated in the process. I do that by sharing tips, interviews with therapists from different approaches, stories of parents and kids on the spectrum, and nuggets of inspiration for the happy days, and the tough ones. They arrive not more than once a week- because I know your time is precious.
=> Try to use “I” less often. E.g. Receive emails with simple tips to support your child, and help him lead a more fulfilled life.
=> You also have a lot of “what” rather than “why” in the middle – could you shorten this or include a little more about the benefits of learning about these different approaches and hearing the stories?
=> I like the ending “because I know your time is precious”
**Is it too long?..
Perhaps a little long for the contact page – it’s difficult to judge without seeing it on a web page. As above, Perhaps shift the balance a little more towards “why” (benefits) rather than “what” (interviews/stories). you can remove “from me” and “I’m sending”.
Since it’s underneath a post- I could create my “bribe” and use it there, for further reading and connection with people who took the time to read a post all the way to the end.
Yes, good idea! 🙂
And it’s good to have opt-ins everywhere. 🙂
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