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Yes, excellent. I like how you finish with a question.
Because your new habit is a lifestyle change. And this will ‘automatically’ keep your weight under control.
=> You quickly jump here from “building a lifestyle change” to keeping your weight under control. It would be better if you’d lead your reader slowly into the conclusion that a lifestyle change helps keep weight under control long term.
You could add a few extra sentences and/or change the order slightly:
For example, if your Goal is to lose 5 Kg in the next 3 months. Focus on creating a Habit like “Workout at the gym – 5 days a week”.
Now in spite of your best efforts if you’ve not shed 5 kg, that’s ok. Because your new habit is a lifestyle change.
[my feeling is you still need to add something here about what a lifestyle change means – this would strenghten your argument]
You won’t be the kind of person who oscillates between gaining and losing weight. You’ll be the kind of person with a toned body for the long haul. You’ve built a habit that ‘automatically’ keeps your weight under control.
See how forming habits is better than just making goals?
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