Enchanting Courses

  • Home
  • About
  • Contact me
  • Forums
  • Student Login
  • Logout

by 

Reply To: Mohammed Ali – Module 10

Home › Forums › Enchanting Business Blogging – Spring 2014 › Group A › Mohammed Ali – Module 10 › Reply To: Mohammed Ali – Module 10

June 29, 2014 at 2:31 pm #1344
Avatar
Henneke
Keymaster

I like the way it’s flowing now. It makes it more clear to the reader why habits work better than just goals.

Yep, I agree. Your reader follows your thoughts step-by-step, and is drawing the same conclusion as you’re drawing. Feels more engaging, too.

Good work on the “why” in your post. The only point I’d question is “Too much stress can be fatal. So knowing how to deal with problems is literally a matter of life & death.” It feels a little too strong, a little too abrupt. Is this why your reader wants to get rid of stress or does she simply want to get more relaxed and happier? Does she want to feel less burdened by so many problems?


Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.

© 2014-2021  Enchanting Courses · All Rights Reserved