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=> What I still miss is a sense of what I learn from this? How does signing up make me feel better? (you’ve done this much better with the text for the autoresponder series)
Also, you may want rephrase “40 Sufi Comics ebook” as the three nouns after each other are a little confusing. Perhaps something along these lines: An Ebook with 40 Sufi Comics to Make You Think and Smile
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=> This is a rather bland last bullet point. Try adding a “why”?
Learn the steps to get to know your true identity
=> This would be stronger if you can add a number (making it more specific): Learn the 4 steps to…
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