I love the first final paragraph you’ve listed. And I like the poetic language used with lots of emotional words. Perfect analysis.
In the second final paragraph, I had to stumbled over the sentence “This is a divinity that has proof of life in the path you have created all around you.”, not grasping its meaning immediately. (this might be of course because I’ve not read the whole post, but other readers might have skipped to the last paragraph, too, so I think it should always be able to stand on its own).
There’s also a strong message here that you don’t need to doubt your skills or your commitment, because hope is all you needs.
To add further stress, the last sentence could be chopped in two:
Own your life.
And face the greatest adventure you will ever experience.
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Excellent work, Arif. Looking forward to your own final paragraph!
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