Yes, excellent job. By playing with white space (and the order of words), you can stress certain points even more.
For instance:
Isn’t it just remarkable?
The Khan Academy is a 21st century online academy. Mega popular. And supported by Bill Gates.
But its principles are identical to the Montessori classroom – a 107-years’ old teaching philosophy.
The Montessori method of learning is special. A hundred years ago, it worked its magic. Today, it is still doing wonders for millions of children.
Give your child the beautiful way of learning he deserves.
Google for the closest Montessori near your home. Visit one today.
And if you live around Koramangala, drop in to ILM Montessori.
You will be delighted that you did.
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These are just minor adjustments, but they help stress your key points. To make such improvements, it’s best to read your content aloud (recording is even better).
I’ve also deleted “in fact” – this phrase can almost always be deleted without changing the meaning of a sentence.
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.