7 grand prize ideas that attract customers instead of prize hunters to your Facebook contest
Yep, you got it. This is much better than your original.
You could make it even better by moving the word “Facebook” to the front – it’s a little lost at the end which means it takes “a long time” before people get what the post is really about. The phrase “instead of” can also be a little difficult to grasp quickly, so you could simplify it:
7 Grand Facebook Prizes that Attract Customers and Deter Prize Hunters
I’m assuming that your audience hates all those prize hunters, so it’s a good term to keep in the headline?
By the way – in your original version you have both “guide” and “how to”. As these have the same meaning, try to go for just one.
Henneke, should I consider this topic as my workbook?
I ask this, because I see that I wasn’t supposed to do this on Day one, but I wanted to try.
Yep, this is your workbook for this week. We start a new topic each week as it’s easier to keep track that way, but you can ask any questions here. Great to see you using the formula already to improve your own headlines!
How to Write an Article in 20 Minutes
Yep, this is a great one. Doing stuff in less time is always a good way to make a benefit more specific. But you make a valid point – the time frame should still be believable.
Please don’t worry about formatting. It’s perfectly readable to have just plain text and links are not important (it’s nice to know which blog the headline comes from, but it’s not necessary to add a link). It’s a good point – I should have made it at the start of the course. I’d rather have you spend time playing with headlines than sorting out formatting.
93% of Bloggers Are Clueless About These Crucial Blog Post Ingredients
Yep, great headline – but the blog post doesn’t deliver as she doesn’t prove that 93% of bloggers are clueless (and it’s hard to believe that 93% would be clueless on the points she makes). This is a dangerous tactic.
By the way, “crucial” is a good power word – critical is probably even stronger.
How To Be More Powerful, Charismatic and Persuasive In 3 Seconds
This is another good one.
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