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Reply To: Jonas – Module 6

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April 3, 2014 at 8:12 pm #445
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Henneke
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Yay! You nailed it.

A couple of teeny-tiny comments (I’m being super-critical here, but you know me):
This is why professional copywriters charge as much as they do. -> this sounds a little like you have a hidden agenda. Not sure whether it adds to the content.

You did the right thing by following the rules of successful sales pages that you learned. -> Feels not as strong as your other sentences and it’s slightly confusing as “that you learned” refers back to “the rules” but isn’t mentioned straight after it. Perhaps something like: You did the right thing by following the copywriting rules you learned. And you’re nearly there.

you’ll be able to put it to -> you can put it to [shorter]

No course can teach it. -> this puts doubt in my mind why you could can teach it in this blog post?

Great job, Jonas! I like how it creates suspense at the end.


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