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April 15, 2014 at 11:16 am
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Good job, Zsuzsi.
You are about to make the first move to your new customers.
You can make this stronger by simply saying:
Make your first move to gaining new customers.
[and then you might want to refer back to keeping Tom’s boss happy – which is something he worries about, doesn’t he?]
Arise their attention.
Sweep them off their feet.
And keep you boss happy.
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.