Are there any more passive sentences in the post that you think I should edit?
Yep, this one:
This feeling comes when your actions are not aligned with your Life’s purpose.
=> This feeling comes when you haven’t aligned your actions with your Life’s purpose.
And this one:
You get such a sense of power once all your agreements at each of the different Horizons are aligned.
=> You get such a sense of power when you align all your agreements at the different Horizons.
When you look at Thursday’s assignment of engaging your readers with questions, you also want to try replacing “one” by “you”. For instance:
The Horizons of Focus Model clarifies the agreements one has with himself at different Horizons.
=> The Horizons of Focus Model clarifies the agreements you have with yourself at different Horizons.
[This will help make your writing less abstract, and more engaging.]
Short & direct sentences definitely have more impact.
Yes, it’s amazing how such a simple measure as words per sentence, can have such a big impact, doesn’t it?
Enchant readers. Woo customers. Win business.