Okay, I call this fixed. Not breath-taking by any means, but serviceable. I hit the marks for analytics. It has a flow and rhythm. Clear call to action. It may look a bit suck-up-ish in regards to Brian, but it is true. And most of the Copyblogger readers would know what I’m talking about…they would respect his authority…and even envy it. Mix of long and short sentences. Questions and “you’s” sprinkled throughout. And I know the word counts vary according to the different …but once I took “really” and “simply” out of the second round, I think I’m clocking in at 242 words. Definitely under the 250 maximum for that submission.
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