Good work, Helga. And well done for kicking out all the passive sentences. Your stats are good.
By carefully considering what’s relevant for each sentence, you could further reduce the words per sentence. Here’s an example:
Each morning the Lily opens up showing the intense golden center set against the blue petals. Something this flower is known for. It’s an imitation of the sun in the sky while releasing a sweet perfume. In the afternoon it would close again only to open up the next 2 or 3 days. Because of this pattern, that reminds of the rising and setting of the sun, its religious significance was great. For the Egyptians it was a symbol of re-surrection or rebirth and connected to the sun god Ra. It still is the national flower of Egypt.
(14.4 word per sentences)
When open, the Lily shows an intense golden center set against blue petals. Just like a golden sun in a blue sky. The flower opens in the morning, and closes in the afternoon. This pattern, of course, reminds of the rising and setting of the sun. The strong associations with the sun make the Lily so important for the Egyptians. It’s a symbol of re-surrection and rebirth. A reference to the sun god Ra. And it’s still the national flower of Egypt. (10.2 words per sentence)
I’ve removed the reference to the sweet perfume. While it helps describe the flower, it distracts from your key point: the similarities between the flower and the sun. And the point about the opening and closing of the flower is only introduced when comparing it with the rising and setting of the sun.
Thank you for adding the link – I love the images you’ve added to the post.
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