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Reply To: Jonas – Module 9

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May 2, 2014 at 5:28 pm #969
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Henneke
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I like your pic in color!

Good work on the metaphors. Looks like you’re having fun.

Sometimes, you don’t need to give all the details.

He was as stressed as a child walking home from school with his failing report card that his parents have yet to see.
=> He was as stressed as a child walking home from school with his failing report card.
[to me it feels quite of obvious that his parents haven’t seen it yet, why would the kid otherwise be so stressed?]

He was as sad as a chef on Hell’s Kitchen after being ridiculed and fired by Gordon Ramsay on primetime TV.
=> He was as sad as a chef on Hell’s Kitchen after being ridiculed and fired by Gordon Ramsay.
Or: He was as sad as a chef after being ridiculed and fired by Gordon Ramsay on prime time TV.

Perhaps: Dreaming up metaphors is like learning how to juggle. You have to be concentrated and relaxed at the same time.

I think you have lots of opportunities to weave golf metaphors into your blog posts. I also love your animal & chef metaphors.


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